Saturday, November 6, 2010

Hillside Chapter 8 intro

Nate was once again standing in the Atrium before the portrait of Anna. She was truly a beautiful young woman. Shaking his head, he held up the wedding ring looking back and forth between it and the painting. “What significance does this have? Am I going crazy?”

He moved closer to study her expression. “I read about you, Anna. I know that you lost both of your parents at the same time and you disappeared. What happened to you? Where did you go? And why do I get such a strong sense of your presence here?”

He put the ring back in his pocket. A strong breeze blew inside the Atrium. He looked around in confusion; there were no doors or windows open. Then he sensed the faintest breath of lilac surrounding his face in a loving caress.

“If I didn’t know better, I would think you did that, Anna,” he said in amazement as he left the room. He didn’t see or hear the other person already there.

Someone else had walked into the Atrium just moments before and when he heard Nate come through the door, had hid. He had been privy to the conversation Nate just had with the painting. He smiled wickedly. He was getting closer to his goal.

After Nate left, he stepped before the portrait. “Are you there Anna?” he asked. “Is this where you hide?” He studied her face and the pendant around her neck. He would just tag along with Nate for awhile to see if he could discover the answers he needed.


  1. OH, the plot thickens! I like it! I am eager to see where this goes....

    must. get. writing.

  2. Thanks Natasha! I keep wanting to go back and edit as I go, but it takes too much time. So am trying to plug forward. Reached the end of Act 1. Now on to the bulk of the story. Are you going to post any of your story?

  3. Wow! This is fascinating. I've never written anything at all like this. You're doing well with this mystery of yours.

    I think you're right in basically continuing to move forward with your story rather than going back and editing. You'll have plenty of time to do that after November 30th.

    I'm done with my NaNo novel for today. I'm trying to get ahead of schedule since I have company coming for Thanksgiving and the next two days.

    We moved the clocks back this evening so I got an extra hour in my day. Hurray for that!

    Best wishes as you write on and on and on and...

  4. Thanks for keeping in touch Shaddy! I hope you are liking your story and having fun with it.
    I am moving forward with mine, but wonder if I will have enough story for 50,000 words!

  5. Terrific open, I was into it hook, line and sinker! I can't wait to read more...

  6. Thanks Kathan - How is your story coming along?

  7. You've added another layer, I like it. Nate is very appealing to me. The strong silent type. :) With everything I've read, I feel like he carries a lot internally. Good job, I can't wait to know more about this new guy.

  8. Thanks Dayner! I'm still looking for a picture of what I think he looks like. I've been lurking around magazine racks looking at ones I wouldn't normally look at (Sportsman, Cowboys, GQ)and so far have had no luck. I've looked on line and found you have to be VERY careful what you google! Hehe Any suggestions?