Monday, November 22, 2010

Hillside NaNo Novel

The fog in her mind cleared for a moment, just long enough to remember what she needed to tell Nate.  The letters in the desk compartment.  He needed the letters.

With trembling fingers she felt for the button inside the drawer.  The back compartment wall opened forward.  Inside was a  manila envelop. She cautiously opened it and took out three letters.

"Here they are," she said to herself.  She looked at each letter, then put them back inside the envelop.  The fog was coming back. She hoped she would remember.  She returned the envelop to the compartment and closed the door.

As she rose from the desk, she heard Diesel growling from the kitchen.  Out of the corner of her eye she saw a man come through the front door.

"You're coming with me."

When Diesel came into the room barking, the man kicked at the dog, then grabbed her arm pulling her outside and shoved her into the van.  He drove them quickly out the back exit of the Museum grounds.

She heard Diesel barking and thought she saw someone watching from the Volunteer Office inside the barn as the drove away.


  1. Thanks a million for the peek at your novel. It brims with action and intrigue--keep it up, my friend.

  2. I'm still working on that pesky thing called show don't tell. After the month is over, I'll be going back to edit edit edit! Thanks for the encouragement Shaddy. Have a great Thanksgiving!

  3. Oh, this is getting exciting! I can't wait to read the whole story!

    I am just trying to crank out a story and a lot of times I find myself telling rather than showing. I think that's a relatively easy (ha ha -- now watch me jinx myself with that statement) thing to fix in re-write. We'll see....

    Coming into the final NaNo stretch now....

  4. DING DING DING!!!! Did Shaddy, you and I pull across the finish line today, shortly after Dayner?

    CONGRATULATIONS! Now, where's that wine bottle?

    PW - I got your email, did you get my response? Let me know...

  5. WHOOT WHOOT WHOOT Yes we did it!! Congratulations to us all!! I'm headed to find my wine glass as soon as I see what kind of goodies we won.
    Natasha - I did get your email with info. Sent pkg, should have arrived today Sat